Staring down at the gun, he looked terrified almost, scared of the outcome of the events if he decided not to finish it, yet also terrified of the outcome if he was to go through with it.
Too much to consider. Not enough time.
A decision had to be made. It had to be made now.
A bang is heard. A body falls limp to the floor.
No longer terrified. No longer scared.
Works really well how the pov switches away in the second and last verse from the action occurring. It intensifies the moment. Good example of how less can be so much more.
ReplyDeleteCould also be considered prose, no?
DeleteI wonder about the placement of the comma in the backwards phrase. Better put before 'almost'? Or...?
ReplyDeleteVery simple narrative, but quite effectively observed by a narrator (somewhere between being inside and outside the 'protagonist'). I like that the text leaves some room for deciding who did the shooting...