he asked me
do you do this shit to get these women?
i said "yeah"
then he asked me
well do you dress like this to get at these women?
i said "yeah"
and when he asked me
do you talk like that to impress these women?
i said "yeah"
and when i look through your feed i remember
"yeah, i do this shit for women"
I like the lack of capital letters as it matches the style in e.g. a conversation between friends on Facebook. It works well with laissez faire attitude the protagonist has towards life.
ReplyDeleteI like how you have used the word ''yeah''in your poem, it makes the poem very interesting and special.
ReplyDeleteThe phrase works well - almost as if it were made to be used backwards...
ReplyDeleteThe poem is interesting in its use of speakers, esp. the ungendered "I"...