Sitting on the bed of my childhood
bedroom,
A thought struck me like lightning
I don’t know if this thought had
descended from the full moon
Alas, it was a bit frightening:
‘One day, everyone I love will
surely perish’
It is the one thing we all know to
be true
It reminded me that the time I have
with them I must cherish
And make sure that I don’t leave them
without a clue
That I love them and will miss them,
there can be no doubt
I will tell them as often as I can
But accepting death and grief, how
does one deal with this?
Oh, how I long for instructions on being human
Oh, how I long for instructions on being human
A great choice: "On Being Human" as a sentence!
ReplyDeleteI appreciated your contemplation in your second verse.
Technically not a sentence, but a phrase...
DeleteThis really touched me. I also think that you picked a great sentence, and that you used it in a beautiful way. You wrote something very strong and moving.
ReplyDeleteTechnically not a sentence, but a phrase...
DeleteDeep, profound and touching indeed - a mindset most of us should be able to relate to. The best way to cope with the dark adversities of life is arguably to unify with trusted friends and tackle it in groups. This strategy just doesn't work so well for us who are condemned to linger in solitude.
ReplyDeleteWas the forward phrase really "Human being on..."? I guess...
ReplyDeleteNice, pretty conventional 'Carpe Diem' poem - a long literary tradition. The best touch - for me - was in the concrete description of the room with the bed and the moonlight coming in through the window...
Yes, "human being on the planet" :-)
DeleteMakes sense!
DeleteI really like your poem! I think it is very strong in emotion and it is something we all can relate to. Both how we are gonna lose someone and how to deal with it and appreciate the time we have left with them, but also that everybody has probably at some point in their life longed for instructions on how to be human or how to deal with something. Good work!
ReplyDeleteI liked the poem, and the strong emotions it creates when reading it! And i liked the rhyme scheme, which allowed you to write some great sentences, without neccessarily making it all rhyme. I also liked that you out "on being human" in the end, it fit so well!
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