There she is, displayed for everyone to see
Looking beautif... wait no, I’ve seen better
I’ve had a busy day and looking at her makes me want
to pee
Don’t look at her, look at the beautiful weather
The design of Pandolf is not for the faint of hearts
Trust me on this, you’re better of doing something else
If you do defy my advice, don’t expect better arts
I will be there and prove my point myself
If you don’t defy me, leave the curtain be
As it is the one protecting you from anything you might
defy
Use me as your guardian and you will be free
But do otherwise and it will be your goodbye
We have been on some journey
It was funny and definitely not blurry
And Darren, my friend, I’m glad you stayed
Just when I was starting to worry that you me betrayed
Some people might question our relationship
And that it a good excuse for our guilt trip
And you, as we finally have come to an end
I want to close up with one quick thought:
These are my rules, which you cannot amend
Read them and obey
them... or you will get caught!
Quite interesting to hear from a "henpecked husband"'s side of things, but who is he? It's not entirely clear, as also who Darren is... Remember the task dictated that it couldn't be the Duke's p.o.v.
ReplyDeleteBesides Bent's note, I would also say that your rhyming is good.
ReplyDeleteIf anything, it could have been even cooler if this was written as a list of rules the Duke had made as to what is allowed and disallowed in the castle :)
That way it would not have been his p.o.v as such. Good stuff though.
It's basically a story about a couple looking at the painting of "the last Duches" on the wall in a museum. Darren is supposed to be the henpecked husband and his wife doesn't have a definite name - she has so much power that she can have every woman's name (very random, I know...). It's not dictated from the Duke's pov, but from the wife's pov
ReplyDeleteHey, that clears it up for me! Put in a few indicators in the poem itself that the setting is a museum, many years after the painting was created...
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