Auhtor
function: Romantic
Notion:
Sins
I am a
sinner. A beautiful sinner going up in flames in the eyes of the liars.
For who
is not a sinner? Plummeting through the nine circles of hellfire below.
I lust.
Therefore I sin.
But is
lust so vulgar?
Skin
against skin, hormones dancing in the air like fireflies. Moving to the beat of
the hearts touching.
I
glutton. Therefore I sin.
But is
gluttony so disgusting?
Taking
that last moist piece of mutton. Letting the salvia covered hungering teeth
bore deep into the flesh.
I am
greedy. Therefore I sin
But is
greed so distasteful?
The
grinning smile being reflected in the golden, freshly pressed coins weighing
heavenly heavily in the leather covered pouch.
I am
slothful. Therefore I sin.
But is
sloth so unacceptable?
The soft
mattress bends gently under the weight. A thousand feathers slowly lifts the
mind far away. And the sun runs in circles.
I am
wrathful. Therefore I sin.
But is
wrath so abnormal?
The veins
in the forehead pounding like hammers. A warmth lights the ears. There's only
one path, and it is red.
I am
envious. Therefore I sin
But is
envy so shameless?
The
stomach tightens, sickening, yet enlightening. Eyes like lightning shooting for
what they want.
I am
prideful. Therefore I sin.
But is
pride so loathsome?
The rush
of a hundred rollercoaster rides. The heart skips several beats. A smile stretching until sore.
Reflective:
By
choosing romantic, I can express what the different forms of the seven deadly
sins, more or less, feels like when experienced in real life. The notion can
also only be expressed through emotions, as they are about the human mind and
body. If I had used the poet instead, I would not have been able to be this
expressive. Lyrical functions have rules, that I would not be able to follow
with this notion. The prophet could also be a great choice for the function. As
a way of spreading the message of the seven deadly sins, and how they should
not define one. In my writing I also tried to make sure that even though it was
about sins, they would not appear as wrong. Even wrath with its warmth can be
welcoming.
I would say that the essence of the seven deadly sins can be expressed very well through sensation as well as emotion. And your poem is a very good illustration of exactly that. Lines such as "The soft mattress bends gently under the weight. A thousand feathers slowly lifts the mind far away" are very sensual and give a bodily sensation of what lying in a feather bed is like. So not only emotion... But the romantic poet author function is definitely fulfilled very well in your text.
ReplyDeleteFirst things first, you already got my attention with the seven deadly sins. Second, I think you did well by putting every single sin into a broader light by describing how those different (mostly ill regarded) emotions can work beneficially for the human mind. Envy was probably my favorite because you mentioned the enlightening effect it can cause. Awesome!
ReplyDeleteI liked the "For who is not a sinner?" part, it caught my attention and makes the reader more inclined to go on :-)
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ReplyDeleteYou manage to maintain the function of the Romantic author: the author is present throughout the text and the reader is included into the author's thoughts.
ReplyDeleteThe incorporation of the deadly sins into your text is really funny and well thought :-)