Author: Poet
Notion: Love
Love of an Artist
Oh, I have
asked myself over and over again.
Why did I marry
thee, fool of all fools?
Thy love hast
caused the hate that swallows me
Yet love so
treach’rous that it besieged me
My misery
is but a catamaran
On a relatively
black and roaring sea
Oh, love
thine absence is an endless drought
Love is not
take and take from thy best friend
So why was
that then thy primary thought
Didn’t I adore
thine whims and weird sent’ments
A ventriloquist
thou wanted to be
With a
puppet looking a bit like me
It had my
name because of love thou saidst -
Love
complete? The ultimate disgrace!
T’was a
humiliation beyond belief
In the cabaret,
thou hadst great success
Thine act was
all thou desiredst in this life
But love? –
no I think ‘twas such a charade
Love is
fickle as the wind in the feathers
Of the soaring
eagle that graces the sky
Temporary
like sun on a winter’s day
While thy slim
bank account grew day by day
hath love like
morning dew withered away
Reflections:
The notion
of love is here dealt with as a poem. It is not intended to rhyme. The point of view is here the first
person point of view that makes it very subjective. If it would have been an
article in a newspaper in the news section, it would probably have focused on
the success of the ventriloquist, his way to success and it would have been
from the third person point of view that would endeavor
to be objective and informative. The language would have been contemporary without
such anachronistic terms like “thee” and “hath”. If the notion of love had been
the focus in the article, it would perhaps been in the form of an essay which
is a very broad genre that can be more or less objective.
The poem comes across a bit strange and inauthentic because it uses the archaic language, but does not rhyme as a poem from the period where such language was employed invariably would have...
ReplyDeleteThat said, I enjoyed some of the metaphors, such as a the catamaran one (again an anachronism). The device of the ventriloquist as the primary persona other than the speaker also worked really well.
The reflection essay is a bit too general in its remarks. Your poem is actually not that personal, and essays are as a starting point very personal.