Tuesday, February 28, 2017

Exiled to Solitude (Writing Game 8)

Author type: Poet
Abstract idea: Depression

Exiled to Solitude
Anguish is a concept few can fathom,
internal wounds concealed from the eye.
Jolts of pain may trigger a spasm,
yet none will ever question why.
Disregarded as a phase of sorrow,
the warnings seldom draw attention.
They say the ache is gone tomorrow;
a theory produced by incomprehension.

The worst of threats need not be rare,
underestimation is commonly applied.
The pysche is split in two by despair,
like the case of Jeckyl and Mr. Hyde.
Woes are hidden behind illusions,
a missleading smile and pretended joy.
Many are deceived by such delusions,
the grief will no one else annoy.

Clinical depression is a serious matter,
a parasitic menace embedded in the brain.
Mental resilience will break and shatter,
for it to feed on the prey till nothing remain.
The menace does not yield to force of will,
a host is not mired in negativity by choice.
Subjected to a void that nothing can fill,
repressed by a condescending inner voice.

Look in the mirror, the image is distorted,
morphed to reveal a hideous creature.
This is he who will never be courted,
devoid of any attractive feature.
Sleepless nights and no motivation,
no hope, no joy, no self-esteem.
Drained from years of deprivation,
this is he who no salvation can redeem. 

Reflection: This poem is engineered to invoke a sense of empathy among the readers, exploiting the subjective voice to provide insight in correspondence with the anguish suffered by victims of Depression and attempting to augment the level of comprehension. If the concept of Depression was processed with the author function of a prophet, there would have been a stronger focus on societal adversities which harbor the potential to induce the mental ailment, enabling the assessment of whether or not it will become a more common phenomenon to encounter in the future. Statistics may or may not be incorporated to increase the level of credibility and render the text more capable to persuade the readers.   






2 comments:

  1. The poem is effective in evoking the empathy you list as a desired reader-influence or persuasion. Esp. the last stanza with the mirror-imagery is evocative.
    The reflection is a little odd, if indeed you only wanted to compare the poet and the prophet function. I've never really heard of a prophet using statistics! But if you are just comparing persuasion techniques, the argument is valid. Persuasion can be achieved in many different ways. Classical rhetoric talks about ethos, pathos and logos as the three main ways. Your poem uses mainly pathos. A prophet would perhaps mix ethos and pathos. Statistics would fall under logos.

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  2. Truth be told, I did harbor a lack of confidence in the comparison of the poet and the prophet, as I was not entirely certain what features a prophet from contemporary times would have acquired. With that said, I suspect that I got some of the terms a little mixed up in the process. You are quite correct, however, and not least in the fact that we have a great deal of pathos embedded in this poem. It is indeed engineered to wake a sense of insight and empathy for people such as these who suffer in silence.

    A prophet using statistics... the more I think about it, the more hilarious it sounds. One can always depend on me to come up with the most controversial and contradictory perceptions.

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