When I first met him, I found him to
be quite charming, in his own odd way. I knew he was much older than me, but I
understood that I had to fulfil my duties to my family and accept his marriage
proposal. In the beginning, I thought it was going to work out just fine as he
was always very attentive towards me, always making sure I was looked after and
taken care of. But in a matter of weeks, attention turned into obsession.
He was always watching me, wherever I went and whatever I did. One time, a young servant brought me a bowl of cherries on the terrace, and as I thanked the boy for the gesture and smiled at him in appreciation, I noticed out of the corner of my eye my husband peeking at me through the kitchen window, his eyes burning with jealousy. Maybe I was just overthinking things, but he even seemed to be jealous of the mule I used to ride around the garden. He would throw terrible fits of anger, and sometimes he would turn to violence. I started to fear him as he kept accusing me of smiling at other men too sweetly and punishing me for it. Therefore, I isolated myself in an attempt to avoid all contact with the male kind as that seemed to be what upset him most. For months I lived in complete isolation and tried to keep myself entertained with painting, but one day he burst into the studio and tore the canvas apart. Henceforth I stopped painting.
He was always watching me, wherever I went and whatever I did. One time, a young servant brought me a bowl of cherries on the terrace, and as I thanked the boy for the gesture and smiled at him in appreciation, I noticed out of the corner of my eye my husband peeking at me through the kitchen window, his eyes burning with jealousy. Maybe I was just overthinking things, but he even seemed to be jealous of the mule I used to ride around the garden. He would throw terrible fits of anger, and sometimes he would turn to violence. I started to fear him as he kept accusing me of smiling at other men too sweetly and punishing me for it. Therefore, I isolated myself in an attempt to avoid all contact with the male kind as that seemed to be what upset him most. For months I lived in complete isolation and tried to keep myself entertained with painting, but one day he burst into the studio and tore the canvas apart. Henceforth I stopped painting.
We had separate bedrooms, and I noticed that he would lock the door to
my room from the outside at night. Perhaps he was afraid that I would sneak out to see other
men. I hardly ever got any sleep, as I was afraid of what he might
do to me if I did not keep my wits about me. On one particularly starry night, I was staring
blankly at the ceiling as I did most nights, and my heart suddenly skipped a
beat as I heard the key turn in the lock. I instinctively closed my eyes and
pulled up the covers, pretending to be asleep. There was a sound of footsteps
quickly approaching my bed, every muscle in my body tensed in preparation for
what was to come, and then there was silence. Never in my life had I felt so
scared. The very second I opened my eyes, I felt a sharp pain in my chest and a
wet, warm liquid soaking through my night gown. The very last thing I saw
before everything went dark was his face twisted with madness and eyes green
with jealousy.
Now, I roam the halls I used to walk, through walls and floors I move
with ease, and he can no longer do me any harm. He had a painting of me hung in
one of his private chambers, behind a curtain. There are other paintings in
that chamber. I have seen his new duchess. She looks beautiful. And terrified.
I like how you make it start out good and then the more she gets to know him, the more bad it becomes. Also, I think you did a great job of showing her side of the story, it is interesting to read how she feels. Lastly, I really like how you made her a ghost in the end!
ReplyDeleteA very nice classic ghost story from the Duchess' point of view. All the story elements are there, except Fra Pandolf...
ReplyDeleteI really like how you turned the Duchess into a ghost who is sort of looking back at her life! I think you have a great sense of detail, and I like how you described how the Duke is always watching her! Good work!
ReplyDeleteI like how you kind of created story within the story, in regards to the scene in which she gets killed (be the Duke I'm guessing) - I also like that it took form as a horror-story, with a ghost Duchess. But how can a ghost write?? Haha.
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