Fail to live
A thought which I find horrifying
Is the one of some day dying
Now, most may only meet this fear
When death is briskly crawling near
Yet, I am young and in my prime
And should not pass ahead of time
Even so my dread grows vastly
And my mind turns strange and ghastly
For dying seems too hard to bare
Just vanishing when you were there
And whereas death is far away
I fathom I must die one day
If I don't learn with death to cope
Of living well, I have no hope
Then until death is at my door
I must feel haunted more and more
Uneasiness and eerie cries
And whispers of my own demise
My torment has become my jail
I fail to live and live to fail
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This poem has a really great rhythm which makes it satisfying to read. The common theme is strong and haunting and really makes you think of life and death.
ReplyDeleteI really really enjoyed your poem! The theme is so moving, powerful, and dark at the same time, and indeed relatable for I think a lot of people. I also like the rhythm of the poem, which makes it more pleasant to read. I also love the way you have incorporated your backwards sentence into the poem, it makes for a very good ending. Generally, I just like how you have expressed your thoughts on the subject and I just think the poem is extremely good; definitely one of my favorites!
ReplyDeleteMemento mori, often coupled with carpe diem, would be one of the most often used thematics in literature, so there is a great tradition to be measured against in your poem...
ReplyDeleteThe backwards phrase mirrored with its forward twin is a good feature...
That poem really sounded dark and chilling to me. I liked the way it gives an insight to a person whose greatest fear is to to die and therefore is afraid to live or let loose. I felt the pain of the author which was touching. Great! Also, I like the simple rhyme scheme in the poem. It made it possible for me to read it in a more simple way so I could enjoy the poem. I think the ending with your backwards phrase was just spot on. Using it in reversed worked very well here.
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