Abstract notion: Women
Function: Author
creatures, lovely creatures
Sure you do! Not at
fucking all! Funny
but well let me try.
You all know women, right?
subject But! An abstract
riddle.
on this You know one of those
awful lot where you ask, “anything
know an wrong?” and the answer
I do not is “no” but then still
“yes”. Well, shit
becomes pretty
complex then.
Or when you are
a jerk but do not
know why, but
you
obviously
are. And did you
wonder why she
chooses
the douchebag
even though she always
complains
about him?
Nah, dude, me neither??
But fuck it! Don’t get me
wrong. I love those
strange pretty fiends.
Chaos is beautiful!
Without chaos we
wouldn’t have had
this beautiful planet
of ours! Ladies, take
it as a compliment.
And like chaos,
I will probably never
understand this
opposite sex of me.
But
well, I just keep
running around
confused and abused,
and enjoy the company
of my female fellows.
I guess the unknown is
the most
intriguing and
after all
this is the most
unknown, so
I enjoy it!
Reflection on another function: Poet
If I had chosen to write as a poet I had been able to write lines that
would have been rhythmic and aesthetic in some sort of way. That solution would
probably have given me the chance to write a bunch of other stuff on the
specific notion, because it would have been necessary for me to find words that
either rhymed or made the text sound kind of rhythmic. Compared to the author
function I chose, the poem would probably have been a little bit more implicit
rather than expressing itself explicit. As a poet I would probably have used
rhetorical language which would have created a sense of poetry, thus, maybe
make the text more intriguing to the reader.
A creative execution for what is one of the most abstract and difficult subjects to comprehend possible.
ReplyDeleteI like how the form of your text reflects your thoughts and feelings about women, that is really creative! Whether or not you are right in your reflection I will not comment on (but you probably are), but I will say that men are just as confusing as women!
ReplyDeleteYour text is sort of an example of concrete poetry - i.e. a text that iconographically is designed to resemble that which it is about. Of course, your text is not exactly 'about' a question mark, but it does depict women as an unknown entity. It a good gimmick, and it lends more interest to your text.
ReplyDeleteAuthor as an author function is a bit too unspecific to be of much use. Authors author anything: poems, plays, novels, bestseller semi-pornography... So, the comparison bit falls flat too, as poet is simply a subcategory of author.
Love the visual presentation of the theme of your text. But, it was a bit confusing to read due to this exact visual priority - or maybe I'm just dumb.. :D. Anyhow, I really enjoyed how your visual presentation depicted an abstract notion rather than a concrete one, this made it a bit more powerful. Good job.
ReplyDeleteFirst off, I love the originality of the visual presentation of your text. I only had a few problems with it, which some here have already stated. Things such as the difficulty of reading. Other than that, this was a fun read. Great work!
ReplyDeleteI am sort of in love with the visual presentation of this text as the reader is required to put more effort into reading it than they normally would do with a regular poem. However, it bothers me that the part of the text that is to represent the "dot" of the question mark begins after a comma instead of a period. Otherwise, it is a intersting take on women being an unknown entity.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the visual presentation very much, however I didn't know how to read the first couple of lines, because it looks like you didn't go from left to right, like we normally do when we write and read. I love how all your thoughts on women just came out with no filter :-)
ReplyDeleteGreat visual presentation, clever idea!
ReplyDeleteThe poem is at first a bit difficult to read (maybe just like women) but as soon as you get the hang of it, it's easy and exciting to read. Nicely done!