Today we
have how to feel good. Yesterday,
I had a
daily breakdown. And tomorrow morning,
I shall
probably have another one. But today,
today we
have how to feel good. The carelessness
glistens like joy in all of the neighbouring
minds
And today we have how to feel good.
This is
the routine of society. And this
is
happiness, which use you will see,
when you
are given your daily doses. And this is naturalness,
which in
your case you have not got. The experienced
hold in
their minds, beautiful, eloquent gestures,
Which in our case, we have not got.
This is
safety, which is always
the
easiest choice to make. And please do not let me
see
anyone using their hearts. This is quite easy
if you
have any strength in your mind. The young
are
fragile and motionless, never letting anyone see
Any of them using their hearts.
And this
you can see is self-control. The purpose of this
is to
open the mind to reality, as you see. We can think this way
both
backwards and forwards: we call this
common
sense. And rapidly backwards and forwards
the minds
are assaulting and fumbling the hearts
They call it common sense.
They call
it common sense: it is perfectly easy
if you
have any strength in you mind: like self-control,
and
safety, and the daily doses, and the beauty,
which in
our case we have not got; and the young carelessness
silent in
all of the neighbouring minds, and the minds going backwards and forwards,
For today we have how to feel good.
Are the two voices the brain and the heart, respectively? Anyway, the difference between the two voices is clearly drawn and the 'war' is an interesting, internal one.
ReplyDeleteThe Reed structure is preserved throughout, and many of the good catch-phrases are used to ensure recognizability. The last stanza is the hardest to write because it has to sum all the previous four up in one voice only. The temptation is to throw too much in there and make it clunky, and your stanza five suffers a bit from that. Can you slim it down to fit the meter better without losing essential stuff?