Spain is beautiful! While the rest of Europe have done nothing but drain my spirit with its ruins and misery, Spain has been a breath of fresh air, seemingly untouched by the horrors that are still too close to now. The white hills on this postcard are from the region I visited yesterday. I have been joined by a man on the recent part of my travels. You remember little Johnny, right? Well, as it turns out, his brother is also travelling across Europe! He seems like a nice man, and though I know you are most likely jumping in joy by the chance of me actually meeting a an whom I like and enjoys my company, I would not order the white dress yet, if I were you. I am still unsure of whether I am even looking for a man? I am scared I would not be able to do the profession of a man's wife justice, much like my recent shortcomings as both a seamstress and a nurse. I do not know if I can handle being a letdown again. I promise I will try to make up my mind before I come back home. He does seems nice, though. Too nice perhaps, as I would hate to bear the knowledge of knowing his choice in me as a spouse would be one of a gentleman's good manners rather than that of love.
I hope to see you soon, mama
- Jig
Interesting twist of the motives Jig might have for her behavior. There is not much, however, to suggest this to be the case in the original story... In Hemingway's version she seems a much more passive character - as indeed does her lover. I think a few more elements directly borrowed from the original would help a reader see the pre-text yours is based on. Pulling Austen in as another pre-text is quite fun, but also confuses the status of your text a bit.
ReplyDeleteI see your point and I think it did end up straying a bit too far away from the original too. I have done some heavy editing on it now, trying to keep Jig's passive character more in mind.
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