I enjoyed reading your poem, it's simple but it has a good content. I like how you have used your backwards phrase in the beginning of the poem, which gives it a very interesting beginning :)
I do think that the rhyme scheme in this poem makes it rather enjoyable to read. I do think that it is quite clever to use the backword phrase for the first sentence as it sets the tone for the rest of the poem. You did well with the the decision to end the poem with "the power of man" as it refers to something much bigger as mankind.
A very uplifting poem, considering the negative connotation of suffering, it builds up to be about uprising and overcoming and obstacle to achieve greatness. Very nice!
I liked the rhyme scheme in this poem. What I liked was that the first four lines end with an 'an' sound, kinda, and then the last four lines are different yet it keeps the 'an' sound, which gives the poem a nice ringing tone. Another great thing I liked about your poem was that the last line ends on 'The power of man' which I first thought was a line that blamed men/patriarchy for the world's suffering (which I to some extend agree with) and thought "oh, here comes the 'feminist'". Then I saw the positive side of it, that we can overcome suffering with joy and laughter. So I noticed you could read it in two ways which I think was great! Last! Your backwards phrase was well chosen because it puts it's emphasis on "suffered". Great little poem!
Very good use of a well-ringing, almost prophetic backwards phrase!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your poem, it's simple but it has a good content. I like how you have used your backwards phrase in the beginning of the poem, which gives it a very interesting beginning :)
ReplyDeleteI do think that the rhyme scheme in this poem makes it rather enjoyable to read. I do think that it is quite clever to use the backword phrase for the first sentence as it sets the tone for the rest of the poem. You did well with the the decision to end the poem with "the power of man" as it refers to something much bigger as mankind.
ReplyDeleteA very uplifting poem, considering the negative connotation of suffering, it builds up to be about uprising and overcoming and obstacle to achieve greatness. Very nice!
ReplyDeleteI liked the rhyme scheme in this poem. What I liked was that the first four lines end with an 'an' sound, kinda, and then the last four lines are different yet it keeps the 'an' sound, which gives the poem a nice ringing tone. Another great thing I liked about your poem was that the last line ends on 'The power of man' which I first thought was a line that blamed men/patriarchy for the world's suffering (which I to some extend agree with) and thought "oh, here comes the 'feminist'". Then I saw the positive side of it, that we can overcome suffering with joy and laughter. So I noticed you could read it in two ways which I think was great! Last! Your backwards phrase was well chosen because it puts it's emphasis on "suffered". Great little poem!
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