Dear diary,
Today, beers were guzzled and things were settled. The hills were
surpassed, and the white elephant is no longer a bull in a China shop. I might
be fearing the operation for no reason. He says it is nothing worse than “just
letting the air in”. I have my doubts though. But he loves me and wants only me
and nothing else. He is also the greatest person I know, and he really insists
on proceeding with the operation… Things will even be like before, and what
more could I wish for?
Dear diary,
It has been a while now. I decided to go through with it. Things are
greater than ever. Things are even better than they were before it all started.
I love him more than I have ever loved anyone. All he needs is me, and I could
never wish for more than him. I took this decision by myself and I will never
regret it even though I lost something great. His sweet eyes when I kiss him
goodnight, and his lovely smile when I pick him up from his cradle the next morning. These are the
loveliest moments in my life, and they happen every single day. I love my
little white elephant.
I take it that Jig went a bit crazy after the abortion. The idea is quite chilling and well executed. I think in terms of recognizability of the original Hem. story behind your text, that we could do with a few more elements being included, for instance references to Spain, the time of the story and her name.
ReplyDeleteA great idea and clever twist. I like how you made it into diary enteries and furthermore how you chose to focus on what happened after the text also. Best of all is the nickname for the child "my little white elephant" it almost makes it seem like all the pieces has come together.
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